felicity WILL you
look this way exclaimed Mrs Appleton you
have been fidgeting all morning felicity
tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin she was holding in her hand and
tried to concentrate on her class teacher who was talking about maths – something
to do with multiplication Felicity vaguely recalled she caught matts eye and
they grinned excitedly at each other this was it today was the day the two best
friends had been waiting for this day for what had seemed an eternity both of
them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes both willing the hands to
move forwards faster so that they could be whisked off home by felicitys
parents at lunch time they were going on holiday
Capital letters,full stops and commas
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Deletefelicity WILL you look this way exclaimed Mrs Appleton. You have been fidgeting all morning , felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin she was holding in her hand and tried to concentrate on her class teacher who was talking about maths – something to do with multiplication. Felicity, vaguely recalled she caught matts eye and they grinned excitedly at each other, this was it today was the day the two best friends had been waiting for this day for what had seemed an eternity both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes both willing the hands to move forwards faster so that they could be whisked off home by felicitys parents at lunch time they were going on holiday.
ReplyDeleteJames loved to play games such as dodgeball,football and basketball.He always pleaded his mum to put him into sport lessons but she refused.James had a lot of friends who showed off to him,to make him jealous.
the first line is wrong you should have "speech marks!" exclaimed simran
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ReplyDelete"Felicity WILL you look this way!" exclaimed Mrs Appleton , "You have been fidgeting all morning." Felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin she was holding in her hand, and tried to concentrate on her class teacher who was talking about maths . Something to do with multiplication, Felicity vaguely recalled she caught matts eye and they grinned excitedly at each other. This was it, today was the day the two best friends had been waiting for this day.For what had seemed an eternity both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes both willing the hands to move forwards faster, so that they could be whisked off home by felicitys parents at lunch time. They were going on holiday!
5MD's class blog
Wednesday, 5 March 2014
Literacy homework.
Please could you re-write the following passage to include punctuation. This can be done on the blog or on paper. Then write your own short paragraph about an incident in space, taking extra care with your punctuation.
felicity WILL you look this way exclaimed Mrs Appleton you have been fidgeting all morning felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin she was holding in her hand and tried to concentrate on her class teacher who was talking about maths – something to do with multiplication Felicity vaguely recalled she caught matts eye and they grinned excitedly at each other this was it today was the day the two best friends had been waiting for this day for what had seemed an eternity both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes both willing the hands to move forwards faster so that they could be whisked off home by felicitys parents at lunch time they were going on holiday
"Felicity will you look this way," exclaimed Mrs Appleton. you have been fidgeting all morning. Felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin she was holding in her hand and tried to concentrate on her class teacher, who was talking about maths. – "Something to do with multiplication Felicity,"
ReplyDeletevaguely recalled.She caught Matts eye and they grinned excitedly at each other this was it today, was the day the two best friends had been waiting for this day for what had seemed an eternity both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes, both willing the hands to move forwards faster so that they could be whisked off home by Felicity's parents at lunch time they were going on holiday!
“Felicity will you look this way!” exclaimed Mrs Appleton. “You have been fidgeting all morning.” Felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin she was holding in her hand, and tried to concentrate on her class teacher who was talking about maths, something to do with multiplication Felicity vaguely recalled. She caught Matt’s eye and they grinned excitedly at each other, this was it, today was the day the two best friends had been waiting for. This day, for what had seemed an eternity. Both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes, both willing the hands to move forwards faster so that they could be whisked off home by Felicity’s parents, at lunch time they were going on holiday.
ReplyDelete"Felicity,WILL you look this way!" Exclaimed Mrs Appleton "You've been fidgeting all morning !". Felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin she was holding in her hand and tried to concentrate on her class teacher who was talking about maths - something to do with multiplication, Felicity vaguely recalled . She caught Matt's eye and they grinned excitedly at each other! This was it,today was the day the two best friends had been waiting for. This day (for what had seemed an eternity) both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes, both willing the hands to move forwards faster , so they could be whisked off home by Felicity's parents. At lunchtime they were going on holiday!
ReplyDelete"Felicity, will you look this way?"exclaimed Mrs Appleton,"You have been fidgeting all morning." Felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin she was holding in her hand and tried to concentrate on her class teacher who was talking about maths – something to do with multiplication. Felicity vaguely recalled. She caught Matt's eye and they grinned excitedly at each other.This was it, today was the day.The two best friends had been waiting for this day for what had seemed an eternity.Both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes both willing the hands to move forwards faster so that they could be whisked off home by Felicity's parents.At lunch time they were going on holiday.
ReplyDeleteI had been sent a space pod, traveling about a million mph but I dared not look back.You're probably wondering how I got here, so I'm here to tell you.It started at NASA HQ about five days ago.I was an astronaut called Robin Nicholas, yes I know it's a funny name, hey stop, no seriously stop.Every thing at NASA is serious so get over it! Anyway, NASA had told me to investigate a dwarf planet that they had recently discovered.I went with my friend, Lott Butt(I'm not the only one with a funny name) and we boarded the secret weapon The Volpixer, the fastest rocket ever.
When we arrived we heard a noise.We turned around and saw two massive eyes staring at us.It was an alien.I screamed and we ran for the Volpixer.I realised it was chasing us.We got in just before the alien came.Suddenly, I saw a miniature version of the alien on the floor moving towards Lott.It bit Lott and a peculiar thing happened,Lott was changing! His face was blue,his face was more chubby and he looked exactly like the alien we saw.He chucked me into the escape pod and pressed the button...and that's where I am now safely heading back to Earth.Wait Earth is not yellow and bright, that's the sun aah!!!! Well everybody knows this is the end of me.I wonder how death would feel.Goodbye world! I feel the heat of the sun melting the escape pod the last I see is my hands on fire.
"Felicity will you look this way!" exclaimed Mrs Appleton " you have been fidgeting all morning!" Felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin, she was holding in her hand and tried to concentrate on her class teacher, who was talking about maths – something to do with multiplication. Felicity vaguely recalled, she caught Matt's eye and they grinned excitedly at each other. This was it, today was the day the two best friends had been waiting for. This day for what had seemed an eternity both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes; both willing the hands to move forwards faster so that they could be whisked off home by Felicity's parents at lunch time. They were going on holiday.
ReplyDelete"Felicity will you look this way!" exclaimed Mrs Appleton " you have been fidgeting all morning!" Felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin, she was holding in her hand and tried to concentrate on her class teacher, who was talking about maths – something to do with multiplication. Felicity vaguely recalled, she caught Matt's eye and they grinned excitedly at each other. This was it, today was the day the two best friends had been waiting for. This day for what had seemed an eternity both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes; both willing the hands to move forwards faster so that they could be whisked off home by Felicity's parents at lunch time. They were going on holiday.
ReplyDelete"Felicity WILL you look this way!" exclaimed Mrs Appleton."You have been fidgeting all morning!"felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin.She tried to concentrate on her class teacher,who was talking about maths – something to do with multiplication Felicity vaguely recalled she caught Matts eye and they grinned excitedly at each other,this was it,today was the day, the two best friends had been waiting for this day.For what had seemed an eternity both of them had been looking at the clock every 5 minutes.Both willing the hands to move forwards faster.So that they could be whisked off home by felicitys parents at lunch time they were going on holiday.
ReplyDelete"Felicity will you look this way",exclaimed Mrs Appleton, "You have been fidgeting all morning".Felicity tore her eyes reluctantly away from the coin she was holding in her hand and tried to concentrate on her class teacher who was talking about maths (something to do with multiplication). Felicity vaguely recalled, she caught Matt's eye and they grinned excitedly at each other. This was it! Today was the day the two best friends had been waiting for this day for what had seemed an eternity. Both of them had been looking at the clock every five minutes, both willing the hands to move forwards faster so that they could be whisked off home. Both Felicity's parents at lunch time, they were going on holiday.
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